A Wise Sloth fan E-mailed me recently and asked me to break down the plot of Perry Mason, Season 1-Episode 5, The Case of the Sulky Girl. So I did.
“Perry Mason” is a detective mystery/court drama book series written by Erle Stanley Gardner in the 1930’s-1940’s. In two decades, he wrote 82 books, which were so popular, they were adapted into a black and white television sitcom in the 1950s that lasted 271 episodes. He was able to write so quickly and eloquently by inventing and using handwritten plot wheels. You can find pictures pictures of his original handwritten wheels here. The words are hard to read, but you can find transcriptions here.
Gardner undoubtedly had more wheels and laddered-outlines, which you may be able to learn more about in the book, “Secrets of the World’s Best-Selling Writer: The Storytelling Techniques of Erle Stanley Gardner.” I haven’t read it. The reviews say it’s more biography than how-to, but it seems to be the only book that talks about Gardner’s writing method at all, and his life seems pretty interesting anyway.
You can write your own Perry Mason fan fiction by copying the contents of my spreadsheet into an Excel document and then using the “find and replace” function (Ctrl-F) to replace the variables. Once you’re familiar with how the pieces fit together, then you can move and change them to create more original stories. Over the next few months I’m going to break down a few more episodes and write an analysis that will help both of us understand Gardner’s formula better.
Click here to view the break down on Google Spreadsheets.
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Perry Mason: Season 1 Episode 5: The Case of the Sulky Girl | |||
BEAT | 1 |
Introduce CLIENT
Introduce VICTIM Introduce conflicting goals between CLIENT and VICTIM |
Setup to MASON taking CLIENT’S CASE
Introduce primary characters Setup the murder |
LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – STUDY | ||
ACTION | CLIENT tells VICTIM she wants to be treated like an adult. | ||
REACTION | VICTIM tells CLIENT to act like one. | ||
OUTCOME | CLIENT leaves angry. | ||
BEAT | 2 |
Introduce WITNESS #4 (MURDERER). Introduce WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE). Setup introducing WITNESS #1. Setup the time and place of murder. |
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LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – FOYER | ||
ACTION | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) arrives at VICTIM’S HOUSE to see VICTIM | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) tells WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) that VICTIM is busy and to come back later, but WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) says he will be with WITNESS #1 until 10pm. WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) says to come back at 11pm. | ||
OUTCOME | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) reluctantly agrees to return at 11pm and leaves. | ||
BEAT | 3 |
Introduce WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING). State CLIENT’S goal and stakes. |
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LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – CLIENT’S ROOM | ||
ACTION | CLIENT tells WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) that she wants her money now, and she’ll get it now. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) advises CLIENT not to do anything, but CLIENT says she’s out of patience. | ||
OUTCOME | CLIENT is resolved to take action, and she leaves to go see Perry MASON. | ||
BEAT | 4 |
Introduce RED HERRING #2. Show CLIENT enacting plan to accomplish goal. (This is an unecessary beat and can be cut.) |
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LOCATION | EXT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – FRONT YARD | ||
ACTION | CLIENT gets in her car and leaves in a hurry. | ||
REACTION | CLIENT almost runs over RANDOM GUY (RED HERRING), but he moves out of the way. | ||
OUTCOME | RANDOM GUY (RED HERRING) angrily watches CLIENT drive away. | ||
BEAT | 5 |
Introduce MASON. State CASE GOAL #1. MASON accepts the case. Introduce MYSTERY #1 |
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LOCATION | INT. PERRY MASON’S OFFICE | ||
ACTION | CLIENT enter’s MASON’S office and tells him she wants him to represent her. | ||
REACTION | MASON asks CLIENT to state her goal. So she tells him that she wants him to break VICTIM’s control of her trust fund. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON agrees to take her case, and she leaves. | ||
BEAT | 6 |
MASON sends INVESTIGATOR to find CLUE #1 on CLIENT.
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MASON follows clues to find more clues.
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LOCATION | INT. PERRY MASON’S OFFICE | ||
ACTION | MASON calls INVESTIGATOR and asks him to find information on CLIENT. | ||
REACTION | INVESTIGATOR says he’s busy, but MASON tells him to reprioritize CLIENT’s case. | ||
OUTCOME | INVESTIGATOR agrees to investigate CLIENT, and they hang up. | ||
BEAT | 7 |
Setup conflicting goals between WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) and VICTIM. Show motive for WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) to kill VICTIM. |
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LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – STUDY | ||
ACTION | VICTIM tells WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) not to comfort and encourage CLIENT anymore. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) says she loves CLIENT, but VICTIM says if she continues to help CLIENT, he’ll fire her. | ||
OUTCOME | WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) sadly agrees not to help CLIENT and leaves. | ||
BEAT | 8 |
MASON recieves CLUE #1 on CLIENT from INVESTIGATOR
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LOCATION | INT. RESTAURANT | ||
ACTION | INVESTIGATOR tells MASON he found information on CLIENT. | ||
REACTION | INVESTIGATOR tells MASON that CLIENT ran away to Miami recently, where she fell in love with DEFENDANT (RED HERRING), who is a starving artist. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON thanks INVESTIGATOR and leaves to go see DEFENDANT (RED HERRING). | ||
BEAT | 9 |
MASON follows CLUE #1, which leads to a dead end. MASON interviews DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) for a motive but finds no cause for suspicion. |
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LOCATION | INT. DEFENDANT (RED HERRING)’S LOFT | ||
ACTION | MASON asks DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) to explain his relationship with CLIENT. | ||
REACTION | DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) deflects, but MASON deduces DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) and CLIENT are married and expecting a baby. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON is convinced DEFENDANT (RED HERRING)’s intentions are virtuous and leaves. | ||
BEAT | 10 |
MASON interviews VICTIM State CLIENT and VICTIM’S conflicting goals. MASON finds CLUE #2. |
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LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – STUDY | ||
ACTION | MASON asks VICTIM to explain why he won’t give CLIENT her money. | ||
REACTION | VICTIM states CLIENT is too immature to have money until she’s 25. | ||
OUTCOME | MASONs presses VICTIM, but VICTIM gets angry and kicks MASON out. MASON leaves convinced VICTIM’s intentions are not virtuous. | ||
BEAT | 11 |
MASON recieves CLUE #3 from INVESTIGATOR CLUE #3: VICTIM invests money through WITNESS #4 (MURDERER)’S bank. MASON sends INVESTIGATOR to investigate WITNESS #4 (MURDERER)’S bank. Setup MASON receiving CLUE #10 |
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LOCATION | INT. RESTAURANT | ||
ACTION | INVESTIGATOR tells MASON he has information on VICTIM. | ||
REACTION | INVESTIGATORs tells MASON that VICTIM banks at WITNESS #4 (MURDERER)’s bank and is involved in real estate. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON tells INVESTIGATOR to investigate VICTIM’s associates at WITNESS #4 (MURDERER)’s bank. | ||
BEAT | 12 |
Setup the murder. Place DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) at the scene of the murder. Place WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) at the scene of the murder. Place WITNESS #1 at the scene of the murder. |
Setup the murder
Commit the murder Show the ruse Investigate the crime scene Take statements from witnesses |
LOCATION | EXT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – FRONT LAWN | ||
ACTION | DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) approaches the house to see VICTIM. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) and WITNESS #1 drive up to see VICTIM. So DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) hides behind the house. | ||
OUTCOME | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER)’s path to see VICTIM is clear, and DEFENDANT (RED HERRING)’s opportunity is closed. | ||
BEAT | 13 |
VICTIM is murdered. Show WITNESS #2’S TESTIMONY Introduce MYSTERY #2. Introduce WITNESS #2 Introduce CLUE #4 |
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LOCATION | INT. POLICE STATION | ||
ACTION | WITNESS #2 is trying to have a relaxing night. | ||
REACTION | VICTIM calls and says CLIENT is threatening his life, but he hangs up suddenly before he can finish. | ||
OUTCOME | WITNESS #2 sends a patrol car to VICTIM’S HOUSE to investigate. | ||
BEAT | 14 |
Show RUSE. Introduce CLUE #5 Introduce CLUE #6 |
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LOCATION | EXT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – FRONT LAWN | ||
ACTION | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) leaves his meeting with VICTIM, and VICTIM yells out the window saying WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) goes with him to get some business papers from the bank. | ||
REACTION | While driving away, WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) sees someone attack VICTIM in his study through the window. | ||
OUTCOME | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER), WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE), and WITNESS #1 return to the house to investigate. | ||
BEAT | 15 – MIDPOINT TWIST |
Midpoint twist Introduce CASE GOAL #2 |
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LOCATION | INT. PERRY MASON’S OFFICE | ||
ACTION | MASON plans and practices the argument he’ll use in court against VICTIM. | ||
REACTION | CLIENT enters and interrupts him and says VICTIM has been murdered. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON’s plans are dashed, the stakes are raised, and he has to set a new goal, which is to beat the PROSECUTOR in court. | ||
BEAT | 16 |
Investigate the crime scene. INTRODUCE CLUE #7 Setup PROSECUTOR’S ARGUMENT |
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LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – STUDY | ||
ACTION | Police investigate the crime scene. | ||
REACTION | Police find evidence of a large ash tray used to kill VICTIM. | ||
OUTCOME | Police plan to do an autopsy report and leave. | ||
BEAT | 17 |
CLUE #7 corroborates CLUE #6. Setup PROSECUTOR’S GOAL #1 |
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LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – STUDY | ||
ACTION | Police asks WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) what he saw as MASON stands by and listens. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) says he saw a man through the window kill VICTIM with a large object, but he couldn’t see him clearly. | ||
OUTCOME | The police aren’t sure if WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) is reliable, and MASON is worried CLIENT knows DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) killed VICTIM. | ||
BEAT | 18 |
MASON interviews CLIENT and finds CLUE #8
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Pretrial
Setback after Setback Build the PROSECUTOR’s case |
LOCATION | INT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – LIVING ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON asks CLIENT what she knows about the night of the murder. | ||
REACTION | CLIENT says DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) went to see VICTIM, and that’s all she knows. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON leaves frustrated. | ||
BEAT | 19 |
MASON follows CLUE #8 and interviews DEFENDANT (RED HERRING). MASON finds CLUE #9 (SETBACK #1). Introduce SETBACK #1 |
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LOCATION | INT. WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) CHARACTER #1’S LOFT | ||
ACTION | MASON asks DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) where he was and what he was doing the night of the murder. | ||
REACTION | DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) tells MASON he went to see VICTIM to beg, but saw WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) and ran and waited. Later, he heard WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) shouting and entered the house, finding VICTIM dead. Then he ran when WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) entered the room. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON leaves frustrated. | ||
BEAT | 20 |
Enact PROSECUTOR’S GOAL #1 Introduce SETBACK #2 |
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LOCATION | EXT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – FRONT YARD | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR tells WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) they’re going to reenact the events to determine if he is a reliable WITNESS #1. | ||
REACTION | They reenact WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE)’s experiences and prove he can tell the difference between different people ‘s profiles through a window. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR is happy that WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) is reliable. | ||
BEAT | 21 |
Setup SETBACK #3
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LOCATION | EXT. VICTIM’S HOUSE – FRONT YARD | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR and WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) leave VICTIM’S HOUSE. | ||
REACTION | INVESTIGATOR watches PROSECUTOR and WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) leave. | ||
OUTCOME | INVESTIGATOR leaves. | ||
BEAT | 22 |
MASON states PROSECUTOR’S CASE and the stakes.
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LOCATION | INT. PERRY MASON’S OFFICE | ||
ACTION | INVESTIGATOR tells MASON about WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE)’s success identifying shadowy profiles through a window. | ||
REACTION | MASON states that he can’t challenge WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE)’s testimony because WITNESS #1 and WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) will corroborate his testimony. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON says he’s got a lot of work to do. | ||
BEAT | 23 |
Introduce SETBACK #3.
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LOCATION | INT. DISTRICT ATTORNEY’S OFFICE | ||
ACTION | District Attorney tells INVESTIGATOR he was seen watching WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) reenact the crime scene. | ||
REACTION | District Attorney tells INVESTIGATOR he will be called as a witness to verify WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE)’s reliability. | ||
OUTCOME | INVESTIGATOR reluctantly agrees to testify against his own case. | ||
BEAT | 24 |
State CASE GOAL #2 Foreshadow MASON receiving CLUE #10 |
Preliminary hearing
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – FOYER | ||
ACTION | INVESTIGATOR and MASON leave the preliminary hearing. | ||
REACTION | INVESTIGATOR says MASON lost to PROSECUTOR. So DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) will be tried for murder. | ||
OUTCOME | INVESTIGATOR is pessimistic, but MASON is optimistic that he can find a clue in VICTIM’s financial records, which INVESTIGATOR says he will have soon. | ||
BEAT | 25 |
Begin the trial. PROSECUTOR states his argument. |
Opening statements
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR makes his opening statement to the jury, saying DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) killed VICTIM and was seen by three witnesses. | ||
REACTION | MASON declines to make an opening statement. | ||
OUTCOME | JUDGE allows PROSECUTOR to call his first witness. | ||
BEAT | 26 |
WITNESS #1 gives his testimony.
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MASON is on the defensive and is visibly losing while gaining clues.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR calls WITNESS #1 to the stand. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #1 tells the court his account of the events. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 27 |
MASON questions WITNESS #1 and finds CLUE #11
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON cross-examines WITNESS #1’s testimony. | ||
REACTION | MASON tries to get WITNESS #1 to prove he saw the murder from an unreliable vantage. He gets WITNESS #1 to say he never met VICTIM. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 28 |
WITNESS #2 gives his testimony.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR calls WITNESS #2 to the stand. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #2 tells the court the details of VICTIM’s phone call. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 29 |
MASON questions WITNESS #2 and finds CLUE #12
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON cross examins WITNESS #2. | ||
REACTION | MASON gets WITNESS #2 to admit he didn’t mention WITNESS #3 answered VICTIM’s call, making him an unreliable witness. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON moves for WITNESS #2’s testimony to be thrown out. | ||
BEAT | 30 |
Fill time and raise tension.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | JUDGE asks PROSECUTOR if he objects to the motion to throw out WITNESS #2’s testimony. | ||
REACTION | PROSECUTOR asks to delay deciding whether to throw out WITNESS #2’s testimony until they’ve heard WITNESS #3’s testimony. | ||
OUTCOME | JUDGE agrees to PROSECUTOR’s request and orders WITNESS #3 be put on the stand after PROSECUTOR’s next witness. | ||
BEAT | 31 |
WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) gives his testimony.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR calls WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) to the stand. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) tells the court the details of the events he witnessed. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 32 |
MASON questions WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) MASON finds CLUE #13 |
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON cross examines WITNESS #4 (MURDERER). | ||
REACTION | MASONs asks WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) about the nature of his meeting with VICTIM and gets him to admit it was about buying/selling securities. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON ends his turn and says he may call WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) back to the stand later. | ||
BEAT | 33 (TURNING POINT) |
INVESTIGATOR gives CLUE #10 to MASON.
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MASON is on the offensive but is visibly losing while gaining clues.
Dead ends and red herrings. |
LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON sits down. | ||
REACTION | MASON recieves the banking information he requested from INVESTIGATOR. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON begins reading the information. | ||
BEAT | 34 |
WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) gives his testimony.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR calls WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) to the stand. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) tells the court the details of the events he witnessed. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 35 |
MASON dodges/deflects PROSECUTOR’S strongest argument.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR asks MASON to cross examine his WITNESS #5. | ||
REACTION | MASON declines to question the WITNESS #5, and PROSECUTOR learns that WITNESS #3 has arrived. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR informs JUDGE that WITNESS #3 has arrived. | ||
BEAT | 36 |
WITNESS #3 gives his testimony.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR calls WITNESS #3 to the stand. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #3 tells the court the details of the events he witnessed. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 37 |
MASON questions WITNESS #3 and finds CLUE #
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASONs cross examines WITNESS #3. | ||
REACTION | MASONs argues WITNESS #3 didn’t know the identity of the caller, but PROSECUTOR says the argument is unfounded. | ||
OUTCOME | JUDGE rules MASON’s argument is unfounded. | ||
BEAT | 38 |
WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) gives her testimony.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR calls WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) to the stand. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) tells the court the details of the events he witnessed and says she saw DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) at the scene of the crime. | ||
OUTCOME | PROSECUTOR ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 39 |
MASON questions WITNESS #6 (RED HERRING) and finds she has a motive and opportunity to kill VICTIM.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON cross examines WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING). | ||
REACTION | MASON gets WITNESS #6 ( RED HERRING) to admit she is leaving out details that raise suspicioun she had motive to kill VICTIM. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 40 (Turning point) |
MASON sets up his finishing move.
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Mason is on the offensive and wins.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON sits down and tells INVESTIGATOR to get WITNESS #1 to talk to him oustside by the window. | ||
REACTION | INVESTIGATOR asks why, but MASON insists he do it without explanation. | ||
OUTCOME | INVESTIGATOR agrees and leaves. | ||
BEAT | 41 |
MASON questions WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) and uses CLUE #10 to prove he had a motive to kill VICTIM.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON calls WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) back to the stand. | ||
REACTION | MASON calls WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) back to the stand and uses the banking information INVESTIGATOR gave him to prove WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) had a financial motive to kill VICTIM and states that he killed VICTIM as he was trying to call the police and then pretended to be VICTIM. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 42 |
MASON questions WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) and uses CLUE #11 to prove he had an opportunity to commit THE RUSE.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON calls WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) back to the stand. | ||
REACTION | MASON asks WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) to read a stack of cards very loudly while WITNESS #1 listens outside. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON ends his turn. | ||
BEAT | 43 |
MASON questions WITNESS #1 and uses CLUE #11 to prove WITNESS committed THE RUSE.
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | MASON calls WITNESS #1 back to the stand. | ||
REACTION | MASON gets WITNESS #1 to admit he might have heard WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) tell WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) to bring WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) with him to get papers on the night of the murder. | ||
OUTCOME | WITNESS #1 confirms WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE)’s voice came from the window, and WITNESS #5 (MURDERER’S ACCOMPLICE) admits WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) killed VICTIM. | ||
BEAT | 44 |
WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) confesses to murdering VICTIM. MASON wins and rests his case. |
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LOCATION | INT. COURT HOUSE – COURT ROOM | ||
ACTION | PROSECUTOR looks to WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) to deny the accusation. | ||
REACTION | WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) doesn’t deny the accusation. | ||
OUTCOME | MASON rests his case. | ||
CASE GOAL #1: Find a way to give CLIENT control of her inheritance from VICTIM. CASE GOAL #2: Prove DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) didn’t kill VICTIM. MYSTERY #1: What is CLIENT hiding? MYSTERY #2: Who killed VICTIM? RUSE: MURDERER faked an alibi by yelling at WITNESS #1 from a window. PROSECUTOR’S ARGUMENT: All witnesses’ testimonies are reliable. CLUE #1 (MYSTERY #1): Client is having a secret affair with DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) CLUE #2 (MYSTERY #1): VICTIM is involved with large banking investments. CLUE #3: VICTIM invests money through WITNESS #4 (MURDERER)’S bank. CLUE #4: WITNESS #2 didn’t hear the caller’s voice change. CLUE #5: WITNESS #1 heard WITNESS #3’S voice during the RUSE. CLUE #6: WITNESS #5 saw VICTIM murdered with a large object CLUE #7: VICTIM was killed with a large object. CLUE #8: DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) was at the scene of the crime when VICTIM was killed. CLUE #9: DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) was seen at the scene of the crime when VICTIM was killed. CLUE #10: MURDERER owed money he couldn’t pay. CLUE #11: WITNESS #1 has never med VICTIM and thus didn’t know the sound of his voice. CLUE #12: WITNESS #2 didn’t answer the phone. So he didn’t know the caller’s voice changed. CLUE #13: WITNESS #4 (MURDERER) buys and sells securities for VICTIM with a “power of attorney” CLUE #14: WITNESS #3 didn’t know the caller’s voice changed after he handed the phone to WITNESS #2. CLUE #15: SETBACK #1: DEFENDANT (RED HERRING) was seen at the scene of the crime when VICTIM was killed. SETBACK #2: WITNESS #5’s testimony is reliable. SETBACK #3: INVESTIGATOR’s makes a mistake that helps the PROSECUTOR’s case and weakens MASON’s case. |
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- 9 reasons why writers should blog
- 11 things I learned about blogging from blogging on Myspace
- Introduction to Steemit.com
- The most important factor in the value of cryptocurrencies, and how it applies to STEEM
- My opinion on online piracy, sharing, and etiquette
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